Copyright David Stewart
Here is my 100 word, flash fiction piece.
When The Music Died.
Music fills the night, consuming my screams as the band plays on without me in the village Bandstand.
I crawl away from him, willing my battered and bruised body to get up.
I feel his breath on the back of my neck. He wraps his arm around my waist, pinning me to him.
His hand makes an air tight seal over my mouth and nose.
Please…
My chest burns.
Need air…
“Violet?”
Darkness closing in, as the drummer performs his solo.
I’m here…
A solitary tear slides down my cheek.
One beat…
Two beat…
No beat.
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heidibusbybrown 
Awesome post – chilling! Love the ending 🙂
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Thank ever so much Cheryl 🙂
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Yikes! That’s a chilling story, my hair stood on my back. It was so vivid, I felt like I was there. Great take on the prompt.
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Wow, thank you so much, I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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Nice take on the prompt! Like the Ending ..One beat..No beat..part
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Thank you very much, glad you liked it 🙂
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Horrid tale but well written.
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Thank you, this was my first attempt at flash fiction 🙂
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And a very proficient first attempt it was. Welcome to the club. I/we look forward to reading more from you. 🙂
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Grim… But well written & well told. You know this isn’t going to end well from the first sentence- but you keep reading, dragged along by the story.
Nice work.
KT
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Thank you so much for your feedback, much appreciated. Glad you liked it.
Heidi 🙂
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A very chilling story. I loved the way you used the musical theme throughout, especially the drum beats at the end.
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Thank you so much, I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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I’m with KT. You can see it coming but still can’t look away. Perfect ending for this horrific little tale.
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Thank you! I’m glad it kept you reading and that you liked the ending. Bandstands won’t look the same for me again after writing that. 🙂
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This is excellent. It put me right there and it was chilling.
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Thank you so much for takng the time to read and comment, it means alot. I’m really glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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You’re welcome! It was my pleasure.
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At first, I thought Violet was an instrument—a tuba or something. But no, asphyxia.
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*Chills*! Great horror story. It was so much easier to go the romantic route. So glad you didn’t!
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I’m so glad you liked it. 🙂
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You made me shudder at that grim end.. I hoped till the very bitter end.
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Thank you for taking the time to read, like and comment. Much appreciated 🙂
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Phew!
AnElephant is breathless now.
Scary biscuits!
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Thank you, hope you like it and didn’t scare you too much 🙂
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I hate to read violence, especially against women, but I couldn’t look away so the writing was very good. Welcome to FF. It’s addictive.
Tracey
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Thank you ever so much Tracey, I’m looking forward to joining in with FF next week.
Heidi 🙂
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Dear Heidi,
Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. It’s a lot like the Hotel California. You can check out anytime you like, but you can never leave.
Quite a chilling write for your first foray. Well done. I hope to see you back.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
Thank you ever so much, I look forward to joining in with the friday Fictioneers. It has been an amazing experience. Huge thanks to you for creating it and making it all possible.
Hugs,
Heidi
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Dear Heidi,
Welcome to the party, pal. Your tale was grisly and chilling and very well written.
Aloha,
Doug
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Hi Doug,
Thank you, I’m really glad you liked it, I’m looking forward to the next one now.
Hugs
Heidi
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Very well written, Heidi! As so many have already said, it’s a very chilling tale but completely gripping. The way you’ve kept the musical theme going throughout is perfect. A wonderful first entry to this challenge! 🙂
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Thank you so much! I was very nervous going into this but it has been amazing. Really enjoying reading everyones work and loving the different interperatations from the photo. 🙂
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The different interpretations are what makes it so much fun. I’m addicted well over my head. I should be concentrating on my third book but I’m spending so much time on WP – doing challenges! Your writing deserves to be read, so I hope you’ll keep up, too. 🙂
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What a story! Grim, tragic…heartbreaking…loved it.
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Thank you, glad you liked Shivangi 🙂
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So very dark! This is really well written and incredibly chilling. Well done. 🙂
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Thank you so much hun 🙂
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Frightening, but great use of metaphor using the drum beats to stand for her last heart beats. Very descriptive and really well done. — Suzanne
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Thank you so much Suzanne, I’m really glad you liked it 🙂 Heidi
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Thank you so much Suzzanne, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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