Frozen Romance – Friday Fictioneers Flash Fiction, Photo Prompt !

I’ve had a very busy week, lot’s going on in the BB household. Hubby is preparing for a musical he’s in, Hairspray. The girls have had numerous hospital appointments which have had me going back and forth like a yo-yo. I’m behind on reading last weeks entries and replying to comments, I promise to catch up this week.  A huge thank you to our host Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, and for Douglas M. MacIlroy for an amazing photo. The idea behind Friday Fictioneers is that  we are given a photo every Wednesday. From that photo we then have to come up with a Flash Fiction story in 100 words.

So here is my contribution for this week, I hope you enjoy it. 🙂

PHOTO PROMPT - © Douglas M. MacIlroy

PHOTO PROMPT – © Douglas M. MacIlroy

                                                                             Frozen Romance.

                                                  By Heidi BusbyBrown

                                                                              Word Count: 100

‘I love you Hannah.’

The ice shifts, creaking under our skates.

      ‘I…’  Screams slash through the frozen air.

Drew’s hand tightens round mine, his eyes wide as we plunge into the lake.

Murky water, surrounds us.

Cold, it’s so cold.

His grip lessens, I pull him towards me.

A dull light, splashing in the water.

I tug him, his eyes open panicked, bubbles flow from his nose and mouth.

Nearly there, so tired.

He’s wrenched from me and lifted through the ice.

Hands reach for me. Fingertips touch.

I’m sinking.

Floating away.

So dark, so quiet.

 ‘I love you too.’

To read more of the Friday Fictioneers work click on the blue frog above. I promise you won’t be disappointed!


48 thoughts on “Frozen Romance – Friday Fictioneers Flash Fiction, Photo Prompt !

  1. Great tension in this story – it’s not often that a first person narrator dies – but I liked that. (Minor, but I think you might need to look at the tenses – you start in the past tense and then move into the present.)

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