Time To Fly -Friday Fictioneers Flash Fiction Photo Prompt!

Hello all!

I hope you are well and ready for some more Flash Fiction. As always, we are given our photo prompt by our wonderful Friday Fictioneer leader, Rochelle . The rules are to write a story in 100 words, using the photo prompt as inspiration. :) I do apologise for my being behind with reading everyone’s work. I am hoping to catch up shortly.

So here is my attempt for this week.  I hope you enjoy it.

copyright-Rich Voza

copyright-Rich Voza

Time To fly.

 

22.6.2016

At 12:05 am –Flight 06667– Exploded mid-air – No survivors.

11:00 pm –

Turbulence, the plane drops and so does my stomach.

A little boy stares at me, bottom lip quivering.

The mission just changed.

11:25

“Dr Walton?”

“He’s secure.”

“Standby.”

11:40

“Masks on.”

Gas creeps through the plane, crawling up their bodies.

It’s better for them this way.

11:45

My team spreads down the aisle.

Timing is everything.

11:59

“Jumping in ….5…4…3…2….1”

White light fills the plane, energy surges through me.

22.6.2075

12:10 am

The passengers of flight 0667 wake-up in a new world.

7:30 am

“Welcome Dr Walton, we really need your help.”

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The Hollow

19th-22nd October 2016

Mad Cow Productions present THE HOLLOW By Agatha Christie – THE HOLLOW is a classic English country house mystery, and rather a lot of fun.

An unhappy game of romantic follow-the-leader explodes into murder one weekend at The Hollow, home of Sir Henry and Lucy Angkatell.

With all the usual suspects assembled:  the jilted lover, mistress, wife, and of course, a butler. It is up to Inspector Colquhoun and Sergeant Penny to work out “whodunit!”

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23 thoughts on “Time To Fly -Friday Fictioneers Flash Fiction Photo Prompt!

  1. Yeah, I’m a little confused about this as well. What just happened? Was this a sabotage and the doc is in on it in? Is the doc also the one to “solve” this particular crime? Not too clear.

    However, wonderful writing, Heidi! It had real pace and suspense.

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    • Can I ask if you read the dates in the story? This is time travel, a team sent back from the future to bring a doctor back who is about to die in a plane crash. However they end up bringing all the passengers back 🙂

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  2. OK, I see what the deal is. I think it was because of the closeness of the numbers, they kind of run together and the shapes of the paragraphs are kind of confusing, too. Now, naming the actual months might be a clearer thing and you wouldn’t go over the word count. I like what you tried to do with the visualness of it. Maybe something akin to making it look like a news item or a report of some kind.

    Thanks for clearing it up for me. It is a fun story! Makes me wonder what they want the doc for.

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  3. At first I was confused by the times. – 12.05 am them 11pm – I assumed meant the next day, and I didn’t see the dates at all. If that was clearer your good idea wouldn’t have been lost on me!

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    • To be honest a few of the people on here haven’t read the dates, which I’m confused by. The dates are clear, I even separated the last date completely to show that you are now in the future. How do you make people read every word or in this case numbers? It has however sparked a story that I’m looking forward to writing 🙂

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      • Hi Heidi.

        I wonder if people went a little ‘number blind’ when reading your story. There are a lot of numbers in play here – the dates, the flight number, the changing times and the countdown. Perhaps changing 5…4…3…2…1 to Five…Four…etc and writing the presenting the date as 22nd June 2075 (as wmqcolby suggested) would help. You could even make the date bold or underline it to make it stand out further and force us lazy readers to take notice!

        I enjoyed your story though. It was a really interesting concept – especially in light of all the recent air tragedies. I wonder what the fallout will be. Why is this one doctor so important? And how do these people who were destined to die cope with living in the future? Was the mission change authorised or did the narrator make that choice? There’s lots going on here!

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