Hello all!
I hope you are well and ready for some more Flash Fiction. As always, we are given our photo prompt by our wonderful Friday Fictioneer leader, Rochelle . The rules are to write a story in 100 words, using the photo prompt as inspiration. I do apologise for my being behind with reading everyone’s work. I am hoping to catch up shortly.
So here is my attempt for this week. I hope you enjoy it.
PHOTO PROMPT © Sandra Crook
Breakdown.
It started out slow.
A virus, they said.
Only affecting animals.
Don’t panic.
We weren’t prepared.
One bite.
That’s all it took.
We were sat in the queue of cars evacuating.
Then the screams started.
Trapped.
I blink back tears, as I fight against hands and nails that claw at me.
“Dad!”
His bloodshot eyes stare through me.
Teeth snapping.
He lunges.
“Saphire move!”
I freeze.
Blood drips down my forehead, ears ringing, eyes wide.
My brother lowers the gun.
“We need to go Saphire.”
“But dad?”
“He wasn’t dad anymore.”
“What happens now Tom?”
“We try to stay alive.”
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Dear Heidi,
You are one busy lady. Your story is a scene from a horror story. Dad wasn’t dad anymore. That line alone is a chapter. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
Thank you ever so much, as always I’m running behind in everything at the moment, so apologies for late everything.
Huge hugs
Heidi 🙂
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Oh, such an intense story! Excellent!
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Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked it! 🙂
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Dad’s certainly having a day his children will remember. Such an imaginative take on the prompt.
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thank you ever so much Sandra! I’ve been using the flash fiction to try out lot’s of different things and I enjoyed this writing this one. 🙂
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Zombie fiction! Great! At least had a protector!
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Thank you ever so much! Got to love a bit of Zombie action, lol 🙂
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Zombie sheep apocalypse!
Loved the line “He wasn’t dad anymore.”
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Wishing I’d called it Zombie Sheep apocalypse now! thank you so much hun!:)
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That started out slow but got very bad, very quickly, goodness! Wonderfully tense.
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Thank you so much Joy! 🙂
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One bite that’s all it takes. Your story took a great bite out of this prompt. Well done.
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Thank you very much Mike! Apologies for late reply and I have been running round like a headless chicken. 🙂
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Brilliant the way the tension builds – I was on the edge of my seat.
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Thank you so much, I’m glad it worked! 🙂
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Love the urgency! Brilliantly done Heidi. ‘One bite. That’s all it took.’ Great lines, well done!
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That bite seems to be something really scary… dad something else… wonder if there are jaws and claws involved…
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I’m intrigued with where this one is going myself lol Thank you Bjorn 🙂
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Great excitement in only 100 words!
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Thank you so much Dawn! 🙂
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I want to say well done, but I am hiding under the bed.
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Hope your still not under your bed Ceayr! Apologies for delay in responding and I still haven’t gotten to read the other entries boo hiss. Thank you so much ! 🙂
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Making progress.
Keeking out from behind the wardrobe now.
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Lol love it! 😉
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Great pace and tension. An original idea. 🙂
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Thank you so much Clare! It was good fun to write. 🙂
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Very intense! A real thriller and leaves you wondering what will happen next.
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Thank you so much, I’m tempted to carry it on and see what happens myself. 🙂
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@Evacuating in the car’ led me in the wrong direction to start with! Shooting Dad can’t have been easy.
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Problem sentence that one lol, thank you hun 🙂
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(We were sat in the queue of cars evacuating – Odd sentence)
A lot of tension in this piece. Gave me the creeps in a delightful way. Well done.
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Hated that sentence, but not enough time to keep playing with it, and should have had a comma after cars…oh well, that’s what you get when you only have 15 minutes to write and post. Thank you so much hun 🙂
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Oh what a terrific story! Tension, suspense, really tight! Telling it in 100 words helps, sure, but it has to come from a fertile brain.
Super, Heidin! Sounded like my dad having a session of waiting in the Driver’s License Bureau … 😀
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Thank you so much hun! I think Heidin could be my new name 😉
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Heidi, not Heidin. Stoopid otto coreckt …!!!
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excellently written horror with suspense and terror
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Thank you so much Mick☺
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You’re welcome
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Wow, zombies because of infected sheep. It’s a good thing the brother had a gun and could help her. Forget Dad as he’s a goner–not Dad anymore indeed. Good writing, Heidi. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thank you so much Patricia ! It was good fun to write 🙂
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